How's My Driving?

[plungeintofire]

How's My Driving?

It's the end of the month, and that means it's time for ol' HMDsky to make an appearance. These will always be optional, and never anonymous. Concrit is easier to accept when it comes from somebody you know, in my humble itty bitty opinion. On that note, be kind. Suggest ways a person can improve instead of just pointing out what he or she is doing wrong, and mention what you like as well as what you don't. If you have nothing to offer but shameless praise, I doubt anyone will object.

To participate, list your name in the subject line, and the characters you'd like to receive comments/praise/concrit for.

Comments

Eve

[gorgeous_sin]

Characters:

Captain Hammer - yesterdays_hero
Cherise Thompson - broken_trifecta
Harpuia - aero_sage
Jim Kirk - mouth_breather
Lust - gorgeous_sin
Orihime Inoue - leekspins
Raye Hino / Sailor Mars - flamescout
Yang Xiao Long - solar_flare

NPC's

The Paperboy - plus_tip

Seriously, let me know if I need to correct or emphasize any of the above characters. The new ones in particular would be super helpful, and even the ones I've been playing a while could use some feedback to make sure I haven't lost their voices.

Re: Eve

[crowning_glory]

As far as I can tell, you've still got your characters down. Though I'm not that sharp on Sailor Moon anymore since I haven't watched it in... yeeeeears. I also never watched Bleach, and am no Mega Man fan.

As far as your Yang, Kirk and Cap'n Hammer go though, they're wonderful! Lust is tricky since last I remember she got really, really burned in Brotherhood.

There's a lot I need to brush up on in terms of canons.

Cherise is also alright. It's tricky with OCs. By default people seem to expect Mary-Sue characters when people have range to make one themselves. She doesn't come off that way, so that's a good thing.

Re: Eve

[gorgeous_sin]

Aw, thank you so much! And yeah, OC's are tricky in that respect. I had to revamp her from an old game I played in and switch some things around to make her more of a person, so I'm relieved she's not coming across as a Mary Sue. Appreciate it!

Re: Eve

[lazygurl]

So far, so good! The trouble with kitchen sink musefests is that it's hard to see multiple facets of characters' personalities without some kind of trigger. Haven't seen Raye blow up at anybody, cause no one really actively annoys her. She's annoyed half the time, so seeing calm, collected Raye 99% of the time is strange. And Yang hasn't gotten to be sufficiently sassy since there's no human bad guy for her to punch(yet). You play them well, I think they just need more people to contrast with.

Re: Eve

[solar_flare]

She's yelled at Harry a few times, but yeah, Raye needs more people around that will frustrate and annoy her because what is patience. XD Thanks! And if you're volunteering Bison for sassy and punching... :3